There is a World to Explore by Pamela Gardner is a very good paper. It was some what lengthy but kept me interested. All in all i would give it a five. I say a five for various reasons, this blog will contribute to all my reasons.
I like how she wrote the paper I think it flows very well. She started the paper off describing why she picked the topic she did in a non obvious way, meaning it didn't start off by saying my paper is about this, and this is why. The way she introduced her paper made me want to read more and see what it was a bout.
I like how she decided to back track in the second paragraph to show what she was talking about in the first one. It cleared up a lot of the past so i could get what was going on. She also talks about it in a lot of detail giving names, locations and dates sets the stage very well.
through out the paper she talks about how much you learn by traveling. She gives great detail and you can tell how much she cares about traveling. The only down fall is that in the middle and towards the end I feel like she looses her structure and how well she details so my attention gets some what lost. I feel like in the middle she could organize her ideas a little better and maybe in the introduction bring up how she visited Argentina as well.
She had a great paper, she should've just organized her paper more at the end that is why i gave her a 5
I like how she wrote the paper I think it flows very well. She started the paper off describing why she picked the topic she did in a non obvious way, meaning it didn't start off by saying my paper is about this, and this is why. The way she introduced her paper made me want to read more and see what it was a bout.
I like how she decided to back track in the second paragraph to show what she was talking about in the first one. It cleared up a lot of the past so i could get what was going on. She also talks about it in a lot of detail giving names, locations and dates sets the stage very well.
through out the paper she talks about how much you learn by traveling. She gives great detail and you can tell how much she cares about traveling. The only down fall is that in the middle and towards the end I feel like she looses her structure and how well she details so my attention gets some what lost. I feel like in the middle she could organize her ideas a little better and maybe in the introduction bring up how she visited Argentina as well.
She had a great paper, she should've just organized her paper more at the end that is why i gave her a 5
Excellent points!
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